“Thus the Evening’s Stillness Deepens”

“Thus the Evening’s Stillness Deepens”
(c) 2022 by Michael L. Utley

I don’t want to break the peaceful
stillness of this winter evening
as the gloaming deepens and the
shadows freeze upon the hills

I don’t want to leave my footprints
on the pristine frozen fields
where the haggard cornstalks gather
contemplating harvests past

I don’t want to burden forests
slumbering in hiemal stasis
dreaming of the coming springtime
and the warmth of summer sun

so I’ll tell the moon my secrets
shed my tears in silent prayers
rest my head on silver shoulders
close my eyes and bare my soul

there’s so much to say this evening
as I wait in darkling meadow
for the object of my fondness
as she peeks between the trees

she has never kept me waiting
she has never left me wanting
she has never sent me reeling
in the throes of winter’s woes

I can hear her humming softly
as the stars begin to sing in
perfect cosmic harmony an
airy astral aria

gathering her scarf and mantle
she ascends as alpenglow paints
roseate blush on pale cheekbones
crimson tincture on her lips

as she rises I stand helpless
in this chilly empty clearing
I am powerless against her
I surrender to her glow

there’s a kindness in her visage
as she turns her gaze upon me
there’s compassion as she wraps me
in her shimmering embrace

thus the evening’s stillness deepens
thus the frozen fields glimmer
thus the forests drift in slumber
thus my damaged soul renewed

23 thoughts on ““Thus the Evening’s Stillness Deepens”

  1. Oh charm of charms, what a viscerally resplendent piece! The choice of words, the repetition of certain phrases, the internal and end rhymes and the assonance add to the great rhythm and make it mellifluous and such a stunning piece to read. The use of imagery and symbolism too adds taste to it and makes the message clearer. This, Mike my friend, is a hit out of the ballpark. Thumbs-up. 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

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    1. Thank you kindly, my friend! I’m pleased that you like this one. Your praise is so humbling. I’ve been struggling with writer’s block recently and I was so glad this came into being. Sometimes all it takes is stumbling upon a word or phrase or image or metaphor to kick-start the creative engine. I appreciate your support and encouragement, Lamittan. Thanks so much! 🙂

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    1. Thanks, David. I really appreciate it. I was searching so desperately for something–anything–to spark the kindling. Images, words, feelings, anything. I don’t know how many times I opened and closed my word-processing program in despair. Finally, that first line popped into my head: “I don’t want to…” and I thought, “What don’t I want to do?” That’s when the floodgates finally opened and the words came at last. I think the most telling line in this piece is “There’s so much to say this evening…” I felt like I’d been waiting in that darkling meadow for ages, waiting for the moon to finally appear so I could talk to her. It was good to be able to write something again. I’m so glad to know you liked this. Honestly, it means a lot to me. Much appreciated. 🙂

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    1. Thank you so much. Your support and encouragement are so important to me. As I mentioned to Terveen in this comment thread, I find myself returning to the moon when I need inspiration. It’s so meditative and soothing, and Basho’s words come to mind:

      The moon glows the same:
      It is the drifting cloud forms
      Make it seem to change

      Knowing it’s always there is a comfort, and its objective view of the world fosters wisdom and peace. I’m happy you enjoyed this one. Thanks again for your kind words! 🙂


  2. You make pain look so beautiful, Mike. And who doesn’t talk to the moon? I know I’ve gazed at it so many times, my mind and heart calling out to it. There’s comfort and strength in the end, a promise of light at the end of a dark tunnel. The meandering emotions and the descriptive scenes lend so much meaning to your emotions. A beautiful poem with so much soul. 🙂

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    1. I appreciate this so much, Terveen. I find myself coming back to the moon often for inspiration, whether it’s haiku or longer forms. It really does provide comfort for hurting souls (well, unless you’re a werewolf!). The moon provides both literal and symbolic light during our dark nights of the soul which all of us experience at some point. I find it incredible how much inspiration, comfort and wisdom we can find just by looking up into the night sky. Thanks for your kind words and continued support! 🙂

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    1. This really made me smile, Aaysid. Thanks so much for your constant kind support and encouragement. I’m happy to know you enjoyed this. And I learned a new term (thanks to you): selenophile. Yeah, that’s me in a nutshell. 🙂 Thanks for being such a wonderful presence in this WordPress community. Much appreciated! 🙂

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  3. I love the first two stanzas – so much of life is about wanting to be out and about and making your mark on the world, and then retreating from that and realizing how much of your own marks you’d like to take back.


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